User:Creeper50/Outline For a Creepypasta: The Escape From Pain

I'm posting this because I wrote the outline for a screenplay idea of mine based off a pasta idea of mine and I would like some feedback on it.  The Setup: Nick Barnes is a young man only a year away from getting a degree in medicine.

 The Inciting Incident: Nick’s dad is diagnosed with lung cancer. When he is months away from dying, Nick makes the choice to start kidnapping people and perform experiments on them to cure his dad of cancer.

 The Central Question: Will Nick be able to find the cure for lung cancer in time and make his sacrifices worth it?

 Plot Point One: Nick successfully kidnaps a human and tries to experiment on him by injecting him with lung cancer cells and attempting to remove the tumors as they develop by mutating harmless bacteria so they can destroy the cells. The bacteria destroys the tumors, but also kills harmless cells as well.

 Midpoint: Looking carefully through his failed experiment reveals that he failed to program the bacteria to tell cancer cells from harmless cells. He decides to look for an alternative way to cure cancer.

 Plot Point Two: He kidnaps another victim and decides to cure him by injecting a substance directly into the lungs. Over the course of hours, it causes the cancer cells to gradually die, leaving only healthy tissue behind. During the experiment, though, he doesn’t use enough anesthesia, and as a result, at the end of the test, the patient wakes up, screaming in fear and alerting police to his location. Nick grabs his cure and flees to home before anyone can identify him.

The climax: The day afterward, Nick’s family receives the news that Nick’s dad is on the brink of death. Nick convinces his family to visit his dad, and while he thinks no one is looking, he injects into his dad’s arm. However, one of the nurses catches him and alerts him to the police.

The resolution: Nick is arrested and sentence to 3 life sentences for murder and possession of drugs. Meanwhile, tests on the drug he uses reveal that it works and it begins to be mass produced.

 Creeper50 (talk) 18:24, January 31, 2016 (UTC)Creeper50