User talk:ItzAdreen/My first part of my novel/@comment-24055022-20160619164356

I like the way the story was going. The moment between Aqua and her mother were so cute. But what happened to her mother? I'm assuming this is in Third person POV, though there was one mistake in First person POV. And you should use quotation marks (") instead of apostrophes ('). It's a little surprising how much Aqua and Riven know at their ages, but even I'm writing about five-year-old girls, and I can't figure out what to type that's more realistic as I don't remember anything from when I was that old. But it's an interesting story.